Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Issues related to the amount of
sugar
in
food
and drinks has been discussed nowadays. It is argued that
food
containing
sugar
ought to increase in price so as to reduce the
number
of consumers. On grounds of fact that these products are the main cause to some health problem.
This
essay totally agrees with
this
question and will explain the reasons. The
first
reason is that
people
, who eat a lot of
sugar
, will risk of many health issues. To explain, the amount of
sugar
increases the blood level of glucose in our body, and
then
people
will gain weight owing to fat storage. Those who are overweight may lead to other diseases
such
as obesity and diabetes.
Furthermore
, there are a
number
of children who have a toothache and go to dentists.
This
is because they prefer eating sweets, candy and ice cream. Another reason is that
people
will eat a more healthy diet if the tax on
food
containing
sugar
is increased.
In other words
, many consumers always purchase money on cheaper
food
than expensive
food
. The government of America,
for instance
, release the policy to control the price of products containing a high level of
sugar
.
Consequently
, the government can decline the
number
of
people
who risk becoming overweight. All things considered, I totally agree with
this
statement that sugary products should be increased the price in order to convince consumers to buy more healthy
food
and decrease the
number
of those who become
to
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