Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students' sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. To what extent do you agree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer.

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Some would argue that books
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more
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weightage
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physical activity. In my opinion,
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education
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can be the sign of
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career, one's
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athletic
talent should be held in higher esteem.
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,students active participation in
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activity during university
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cultivate their behaviour and overall
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development
. In
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States of America,
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renowed inistitute empasis on
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by preapring their team for various national
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despite ecxellent academic status.
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,
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clear the quality of learning depends on the healthy life of students.
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, there are some people who
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tthat
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that
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must be focused on subjects and high quality
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of library books.
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discuss
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that
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is not
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on books than
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they
that
will not achieve the profession that
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for.Secondaly the tratonal method lay strees on stidents
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affect
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their level.
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Henceforth
universities
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encouraged
to increase their
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budge
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budget
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to facilitate the
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infrastructure. In conclusion, universities can enhance the
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facilities
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as tennis, cricket, football and gym as they develop libraries. I am of the thought that right approach they should do.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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