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Some think that father's should have time off from work after the birth of a child. Do you agree on this or not.

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Some people believe that
father
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a father
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 must have
days-off
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days off
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 and be responsible after having a baby. I completely agree with
this
 statement. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the importance of being available at home 24/7 after giving
child birth
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childbirth
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for
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to
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 fathers.
To begin
 with, as soon as having an infant,
parents'lives
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parents lives
 will be complicated. The mother will be sick and, busy with feeding and taking care of the new toddler, so
father
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the father
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 plays a crucial role.
First
, he can assist with household activities
such
 as washing dishes, cleaning the home and preparing meals.
In addition
, the
female-parent
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female parent
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 suffers mentally, physically and emotionally, so she needs someone
besides
 her.
For instance
, my aunt was pregnant with a twin and she lived in a remote town, when she gave birth to the children, her husband was with her and helped with household work, and taking care of the twins after she took a nap.
Thus
, the father's presence is essential.
On the other hand
, the responsibilities of having a new member in the family will increase gradually.
Hence
, some fathers need to work extra hours to maintain
his
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their
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 children a better life and education. They should work overtime to supply their sons and daughters
the
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with the
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 requirements
such
 as
,
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apply
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 milk and
disaper
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disappear
diaper
diapers
. To summarise, the absence of males-parents will cause many problems, especially when there is no one
can
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who can
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 look after their families.
As a result
, the government should offer the men time-off with salary.
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