Some people think young people should be required to have full-time education until they are at least 18 years old.
The duration of full-time education that one should adopt has been a debated issue. While some people suggest that one should not end their full-time studying until adolescence age, I totally disagree with
this
idea.
Firstly
, finance should be taken into consideration when one’s time is fully devoted to studying. For those whose family struggles with financial
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such
as working in a factory. Hence
, full-time education for their whole teenager
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Secondly
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will offer a better future has been becoming rampant on various media platforms. This
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at the age of 16, he started his own business and became one of the most successful entrepreneurs in the world. This
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