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Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Money
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 comes with responsibility and it can be in any way
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 as social responsibility, nation-building or community service. Many
people
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, specifically, think that richness provides
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 opportunity to help the needy. Have rich
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 had
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 opportunity? I think they have for two key reasons proper use of extra
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 and supporting locals
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, their extra
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 can be used by the underprivileged to get food or education. Certainly, wealthy
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 have a lot of
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, after a certain limit, which is no use for them.
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 is the chance and they can support their native
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 with that additional
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. There is no doubt that they are not doing it,
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, Ratan Tata, the owner of Tata Companies, is operating two NGOs, which is providing financial assistance for higher studies to students who are talented but with bad financial conditions.
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, more
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 will be benefited from one person's wealth.
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, it is their social responsibility to support
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 who helped them to get there.
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 all efforts to reach higher heights were there, directly or indirectly others have contributed to it. They are in a position in which they can be returned to society. It can be in any form
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 as opening free schools, old age homes etc.
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, ISCON, a group of wealthy
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 from Rajasthan, is building free amenities for locals. It is giving back. In conclusion, the privileged person has
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 chance of improving their nation with the extra
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. Though it is their hard-earned
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, returning to your supporter and increasing the use of the
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 they should focus on.

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