Some people believe that professional sportsmen and women are paid too much money nowadays in relation to their usefulness to society. Do you agree or disagree?

In the modern world, it is considered that top athletic stars have an extremely large income and
this
profit is not associated with their contribution to society. Whether
that is
true or not, I will try to find out in
this
essay.
To begin
with, there are a lot of reasons why the average salary of top sportsmen and women are several orders of magnitude higher than the average salary of ordinary people. The
first
and the main reason is that the sportsmen and women spend the best part of their life to achieve a significantly high level in their
sports
. Severe injuries often come up in the path of glory. And far not all people who begin to go on
this
way eventually will be able to end it. All of us are delighted by the champions' life stories that are widely broadcast on social media, but the stories of people who were forced to stop their
sports
careers as the result of trauma have equal importance.
On the other hand
, high income in some
sports
is relatively associated with audience interest in certain
sports
.
For example
, if we compared the champions prize money in ping pong and tennis, we would find out that the grand prize in tennis covered several tens million American dollars, but in table
tennis
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it is only 100000-150000$.
Such
a huge difference could be explained only by the different public interests between these two
sports
and
moreover
various media coverage. In conclusion,
although
champions salaries in top-popular
sports
remain utterly high, in my opinion, their income level is more related to interest in the media rather than their contribution to society.
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