In recent years a large number of highly professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer businesses are leaving their countries for developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

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It is true that most celebrities are known for their luxurious lifestyles than for their performance or talents these days. Many

people

think that

this

kind of attitude is not a good example for the young generation. To a certain extent, I would agree that

this

kind of behaviour would be a bad example for the society, but there are other famous

people

are popular due to their outstanding accomplishment. On the one hand, it is a fact that many famous

people

become popular due to their fancy lifestyle,

instead

of their outstanding achievements these days. Their acting talent might be standard or below the average, but they are making a sensation to the public by showing their wealth and glamorous lifestyles. One of the examples would be Kim Kardashian who is famous for her reality television program, whereas it mostly shows her luxurious mansion, party and shopaholic lifestyles and less of her acting. It is believed that the behaviour would be a negative influence for the young

people

as it teaches them about hedonistic lifestyle.

On the other hand

, there are celebrities who are popular for their incredible acts or outstanding performance. These

people

have shown to the world that they have reached success due to strong determination and hard work, and the public always recognise them for their masterpiece of arts and great achievements. One of the examples would be the legendary English footballer David Beckham. He was not only a good athlete but

also

became the model of some sports apparel.

Although

David Beckham sometimes had shown his glamorous lifestyle, he had

also

shown to the public that he was a good football player. He had informed in his biography that to achieve success, he had to work hard at a young age, as he had to practice doing penalty kicks for around 1000 kicks per day consistently. These kinds of celebrities are worth being followed by the young generation. In conclusion, many famous

people

are well known for their wealth and luxurious style,

instead

of their achievement and it would be a negative example for the young age

people

. To a certain point, I would disagree with the opinion, since there are other

personality

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personalities

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who

are

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famous due to their great talent and performance. In my opinion, I think the public should be more selective in choosing their role models, not just in front of the camera, but we should

also

see from their personal life as well.

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