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Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime . Many people think that having more police on streets is the only way to reduce crime. To what extent do you agree?

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Crime
 is prevalent in many countries, with the developing nations feeling the brunt of it. People argue that policing increased policing on the streets could curb the surge in criminal activity.
However
, I partially agree with
this
 and will substantiate my reasoning in the course of
this
 essay.
First
 of all, let us look at the argument for policing on the street. Whilst it is necessary, we need to understand that the reason people turn to
crime
, is because of the lack of resources, fewer opportunities to get jobs, and inability to afford basic requirements.
Therefore
, the lure of instant money provided by
crime
 helps to convince people to take
this
 road. So, for starters, the government's should do their part and improve living conditions for their citizens and
this
 may help to curtail
crime
. The advancement of technology has led to more
crime
,
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 because now criminals have adopted technology and are using it to perpetrate major crimes.
For example
, a couple of months ago, Russian cyber gangs targeted major corporations demanding $70 million in Bitcoin. Now the issue with cybercrime, is that hackers have found ingenious ways to mask their identity so as not to get caught. The only thing
that is
 known after 3 months of these attacks, is that the attackers are from Russia. Who they are and their exact location remains unknown. In
this
 day and age,
crime
 is happening both, online and on the streets, and strict policing needs to be done on both platforms to try and stop
this
 increase in
crime
.
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