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Band 4

Some people think that Hardwork hands in achieving financial success working hard does not contribute to financial success discussible both views and give your opinion

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Shoes
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 Do you like buying
shoes
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? How often? I don’t like buying
shoes
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. Once I buy
shoes
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, I wear them for a long time. Have you ever bought
shoes
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 online? Of
course
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course,
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 I have. I bought my
shoes
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 online
last
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 year. I bought it on Nike’s official website. How much money do you usually spend on
shoes
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? I don’t wear
shoes
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 that are too expensive, but I think I spend about 100 dollars on
shoes
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. Which do you prefer, fashionable
shoes
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 or comfortable
shoes
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? I prefer comfortable
shoes
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. Because I have to walk every day,
comfortable
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 is the best.
Headphones
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 Do you
use
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headphones
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? Yes, I
use
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headphone
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headphones
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. I
use
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 Beats wireless
headphone
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, it is very light so I bring
it
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them
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 in my backpack
everyday
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. What type of
headphones
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 do you
use
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? As I said, I
use
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 wireless
headphones
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. I
use
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 it when I study IELTS
,
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apply
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 or
doing
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do
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workout
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workouts
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. When would you
use
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headphones
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? I usually
use
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headphone
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headphones
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 when I
got
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get
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 distracted by something in
library
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the library
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 or gym. I mean, when I want to focus on something, I
use
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headphone
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headphones
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. In what conditions, you won't
use
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headphones
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? I won’t
use
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headphone
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at
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in
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 public places. It is very dangerous to
use
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headphone
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headphones
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 on the road because I cannot hear any sounds around me.
Work
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 or study What
work
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 do you do? Currently, I am working as a CEO of my
company
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, I am managing the
overall
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 operation and resources of my
company
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, Do you like your
job
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? Definitely, I love my
job
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. I love the
work
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 I do. My
job
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 brings me bread and butter and I am grateful
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this
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for this
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job
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. Why did you choose to do that type of
work
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 (Or, that
job
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)? After I graduated from university, I wanted to start my own business. I founded my
company
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 with some of my friends, and since
then
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, I have worked for my
company
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. Do you miss being a student? I really miss my student life once I get
involve
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 in the workplace. For
me
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me,
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 I think when I’m a student, at least I have someone guide me,
whereas
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 at
work
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mostly
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you must guide yourself. The academic environment appears to be a
comefort
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comfort
 zone for me.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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