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Some countries are considering imposing curfews in which teenagers will not be allowed outdoors at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this policy?

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In the era of democracy,
constitution
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the constitution
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 grants citizens to
move
 freely irrespective of time and place.
Curfew
 imposed by the government to
control
 any grave
situation
 and curbing
right
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the right
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 of
teenage
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teenagers
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 to
move
 freely during
night
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the night
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 is only to protect them. I am positively agreeing with it,I would intend to explain my view
the
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 following essay. Though every individual has the right to go anywhere
during
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at
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 any point of time is
enshrine
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 in the constitution
however
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, State has the responsibility to protect its people.
Thus
, to
control
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situation
 in an area
curfew
 is imposed to curtail any untoward event and the orders are issued
especially
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specially
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 for the
teenage
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teenagers
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 not to
move
 out without the company of a responsible individual.
This
 help to
control
 the menace at the earliest ensuring the safety of the citizens. With
government
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the government
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 acting in full potential to
control
 the
situation
also
its
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 duty of the people to cooperate in maintaining law and order especially
teenage
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teenagers
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. At times events occur
such
 as riots and protests when
life
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the life
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 of citizens are at stake. Few
situation
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situations
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 which demands to
move
 like in
emergency
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an emergency
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situation
 where hospitalization is necessary teenage should be accompanied by the elderly person.
For example
,
if
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in
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case
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the case
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 of epileptic attack hospitalization care is needed in
such
 case should be allowed with adequate protection with
sequrity
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security
 personal by the local police.
Government
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 has started 104
service
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services
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 which is a boon for patients in need of emergency care especially during
night
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the night
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 and if
curfew
 is laid down. In conclusion, reasonable restriction during
curfew
 for
teenage
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teenagers
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 is good to protect them from unforeseen danger.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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