Some countries are considering imposing curfews in which teenagers will not be allowed outdoors at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this policy?

In recent years, the government has paid more attention
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teenagers by imposing several curfews. While there are many benefits to
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restrictions to teenagers having a late-
night
event without the adult, there are
also
drawbacks to be considered. In
this
essay, I tend to disagree with the former argument that it will have negative impacts on
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development.
On the other hand
, introducing the legislation of not allowing teenagers to go out at
night
with the absence of the adult helps prevent them from being bullied or
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kid napped
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. The reason for
this
is the gang always work on the
night
shift with less police patrol, which might be easy for them to approach and pose
serious
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threat to adolescents for money.
Furthermore
, the less the children leave home at
night
, the less they can avoid social crimes,
such
as smoking,
addicting
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heroine with bad friends.
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the other hand, my view is that
this
limitation might have reverse effects on the younger to mature.
This
is because
this
will put pressure on their mental health.
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, while students would have to spend most
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daylight
on
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studying at
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school, they might eliminate their academic pressure by hanging out in the evening.
In contrast
, if the authority did not encourage the children to have
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night
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out without parents' supervision, the young could not self-address troubles at
this
certain time since parents are not always with them. In conclusion,
although
the curfew can physically protect adolescents from
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criminal
offence
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, it is impossible to work in long run. In my opinion, facing nightly serious situations plays an essential role in the path to children becoming mature and independently-minded adults.
Submitted by Andy on

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