Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while others think it is fault of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Everything has two sides for and against and the question if
governments
are responsible for children's adiposity is not an exception. While others have an opinion that family influences on Use synonyms
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much stronger. Add a verb
areunderages
wereunderages
This
essay discusses both views and argues that lifestyle comes from the family.
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Firstly
, some persons consider that Linking Words
governments
can control minors' obesity. It is reached by Use synonyms
significant
decrease Correct article usage
a significant
the
number of harmful Change preposition
in the
food
on sale. Children can not control and change their own habits on Use synonyms
food
. It leads to unconscious consumption of sweets and fat meals. Use synonyms
Moreover
, almost all these products are Linking Words
more tasty
than vegetables or fruits and Replace the words
tastier
this
fact especially attracts youth people. And Linking Words
definitely
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,definitely
governments
have to motion the quality of Use synonyms
such
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food
and reduce its amount in shops.
But in my opinion, parents and guardians are the only individuals who can improve the situation with minors' obesity. Undoubtedly, the family gives the habits to do sports daily and eat healthy Use synonyms
food
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instead
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food
. Use synonyms
For instance
, many studies lately show that the most common reasons Linking Words
of
children's adiposity are due to habits and lifestyle which are given by their family. Change preposition
for
Therefore
, only parents can improve it.
In conclusion, it is important to say that Linking Words
overweight
is one of the most relevant problems nowadays. Add a missing verb
being overweight
Accordingly
, both Linking Words
governments
and parents have to throw all Use synonyms
the
strength to solve Change the word
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this
harmful and hazardous society issue.Linking Words
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