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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
it is undeniable that environmental problems impact both governments and people in the world. Most
individuals
 believe that they cannot help to save the
environment
 and it is a mission for governments and large firms. From my point of view, I personally disagree with
this
 topic for many reasons, describes in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, environmental problems are the main issue that all
sectors
concerned
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 about its impact for many reasons due to it can attack both human life and asset so we cannot deny that we are unconsciously going to protect the
environment
 at the same time.
Firstly
, government and business
sectors
 usually issue a campaign for protecting the
environment
 to image the reputation of each sector
such
 as CSR activities that need to use cooperation from
individuals
.
Secondly
, the environmental laws and regulations are specified for society to raise awareness of humans.
In other words
, laws and regulations want to communicate with people for responsibilities in terms of
environment
ส protection.
Finally
, I personally agree with the idea that protecting the
environment
 should start with individual
sectors
 due to
individuals
 have a main role in protecting and improving the
environment
 more than giving an important role to large
sectors
such
 as governments or organizations since sometimes it always focuses on profit than the
environment
.
For instance
, if the Company issues environmental policies but humans do not concentrate on them, it cannot protect the
environment
 as well.
Additionally
, humanities always protect the
environment
 from reuse, reduce and recycle the trash which has a more important role from other
sectors
 In conclusion, both
individuals
 and
sectors
 have to focus on environmental problems and cooperate in resolution for protecting the
environment
 that we can safe a beautiful
environment
 in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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