Some people argue that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others believe a permanent job is more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

it has been argued that
a
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self-satisfaction work is much
neccessary
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necessary
than
a
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secure employment.
however
, others oppose
this
,
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and
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a stable
job
have
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more importance in a person`s
life
. in my perspective,
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think it depends upon an individual`s choice, but according to
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my
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me
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job
satisfaction
give
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us happiness and joy in our
life
. in
this
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upcoming paragraphs,
i
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will
disscus
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discuss
my viewpoints briefly.
to begin
with, many people prefer that kinds of
job
which give them pleasure, happiness and relax from stress and tensions. to explain
this
,
firstly
, if a man or woman do work according to his/her wish, s/he will never feel bored for their
job
.
for example
, my friend before was working in an office, she was not happy with her
job
because of her officer`s behaviour and colleagues as well.
its
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true the
job
was secure,but she always suffered from stress , tensions and different negative thoughts. later she quit the
job
and joined a small business, according to her choice, now whenever
i
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meet with her, she always seems very satisfied enjoy
life
with her family.
furthermore
,
on
the
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other
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side,
secure
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a secure
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job
, always helps in critical situations, if something happened wrong.to cite an
exapmle
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example
for
this
, recently, by
mistake
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a computer got damaged by my brother, he was in tension about that mishappening and thought he had to pay all
exepenses
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expenses
for that, but
company
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paid for everything.
hence
,
secure
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a secure
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job
helps in
such
kind
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of problems. in the opposition,many people claim that stable work
job
have
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more importance as
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to other jobs.
firstly
,
permanent
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a permanent
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job
give
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a
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relief from unemployment as
less
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chances to get fired from that
job
as in
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a satisfied
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satisfied
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job
or
secure
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job
the boss can easily ask to quit the
job
.
secondly
,
permanent
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the permanent
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job
is
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also
runs for long term or long time period, even
also
passes to the generation.
for instance
, in India if
a
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army man became
martyr
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, the authority pass the
job
to his son.
as a result
,
less
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chances of getting
lose
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the
job
.
in addition
, finding a self-
satisfication
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satisfaction
job
is a daunting task and need
a
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enough time to search
this
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job
. in conclusion, it has been noticed that
,
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every
job
have its own importance, it
depend
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upon a person`s wish what kind of
job
s/he wants to pursue in their
life
. but in
opinion
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my opinion
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, self-
satifaction
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satisfaction
is more important for a
job
and happy
life
. as mostly
job
gives stress,tensions and burden.
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