CCTV cameras are a common sight in town centres, on public transport and outside many businesses. They not only help identify and apprehend criminals but also serve as a crime deterrent. However, some people believe that they are intrusive and constitute a breach of privacy.

To avoid criminality
CCTV
cameras
used
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in city
centers
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. It helps to identify criminals and serves as a crime detector,
however
it destroys
personal
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the personal
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privacy
of citizens. In my opinion,
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for public
safety
overweights
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its difficulties for any humankind
privacy
.
First
of all, while controlling the town
center
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with the help of
CCTV
cameras
, citizens feel
safety
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themself. Any kind of crime and
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bullying
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bulling
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bullying
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will be detected with camera control. If
suspective
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person visits inaccessible places, there will be policy any
second
.
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, people
meets
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in the central square and provide their time well,
however
it is a place where thief and criminals spend their time to theft expensive goods.
Therefore
, police members would be able to control
such
situations.
In addition
,
government
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should take
a
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control
the
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whole system, and
nation
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should lend a hand
for
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leaders to make a clever and constructed system. People should have to trust
to
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CCTV
cameras
,
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because it keeps
safety
citizens life. There is a significant feature of having
cameras
and one of them is that, if public
safety
is done,
personal
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the personal
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privacy
of anyone will
covered
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. To sum up,
CCTV
cameras
are necessary to detect crimes and keep up
safety
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the safety
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of citizen’s life and
privacy
.
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