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Learning about the past has no value to those of us living in the present.Do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today, it is rife that
history
 subject is included in the secondary school subject list.
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 of
people
 endorse that past must not be investigated in present days.
However
, I definitely contemplate that we should study about it and teach another generation as well. To start with, as we live nowadays in
high-tech
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 moderated and developed world, we may not think deeply about old ages or do not know the value of it. There are several reasons why
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humankind is incurious about ancient times.
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first
, their hustling and busy life do not consent to learn about
history
. They strive for being competitive and
achieving
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 their goals.
Secondly
, in their opinion,
history
 does not give them any benefits. Because technology changed the way
of
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people
 living habits and
thinking
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.
Thus
, they value highly the future not
past
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the past
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.
On the other hand
, in my opinion, antecedent times should be remembered, researched, examined and exemplified. The reason is why
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History
 provides us with valuable experience, mistakes and great
people
.
For instance
, if
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an individual
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individual
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do
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 not repeat the mistakes that our ancestors made, we can achieve effective results.
Moreover
, the great
people
 from
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the past
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 can give us
inspiration
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 to be successful and go ahead to
pursuit
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the pursuit
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 of our goal.
Therefore
, it will be
great
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 loss if the oldest times are stopped to be learned. To conclude, even though in the present world one must keep on without looking back because of competitiveness, antecedent moments should never
been
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 forgotten in order to know who
were
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 in origin.
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