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Some people think that sports play an important role in the development of society. Others think this is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The issue of whether
sports
 have hugely impacted our society has become increasingly unpopular to a certain demographic. These
people
 believe that
sports
 are simply recreational.
However
, some would argue that
sports
is
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 not only necessary, but it is
also
 influential on certain aspects of our lives. I completely agree with the latter notion
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 and will elaborate my opinions in the essay below. On the one hand, some contend that athletics are a form of entertainment that should not be taken seriously. It is a reasonable assumption for those who do not practice
sports
 regularly, because they do not possess as much passion for physical activities as professional athletes, rather, these
people
 have other pursuits.
Therefore
,
this
 group of unenthusiastic
people
 would view
sports
 as a subject of less significance among other things.
On the contrary
, some
people
 will persist that
sports
 have influenced society
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 a number of aspects, financially, culturally and even affecting our health. It is undeniable that ever since the development of technology,
people
 have been exercising a lot more than in the past, both physical and non-physical
sports
.
Thus
, our physical and mental health
have
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 been improved to some extent thanks to
sports
.
Moreover
, we now have big scale competitions to gather all participants from different parts of the world.
This
 can potentially strengthen the relationship between nations, through means of sportsmanship and healthy competitiveness. On an economic level,
sports
, particularly those in the physical category, have always been a profitable market,
consequently
 boosting the financial status of many nations.
Mentionably
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,
sports
 enables related industries to thrive as well.
Sports
 events create opportunities for corporations
which
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 sell products that not only cater to
sports
 fans
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 but
also
 satisfy the non-fans by promoting interesting media content.
Furthermore
, hosting countries for these important events has proved to be lucrative. Brazil,
for instance
, hosted the 2016 Olympics, receiving a massive influx of international tourists in the process. Through all
aforementioned
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 reasons, it is safe to assume that
sports
 can effectively contribute to a country's economic success. In conclusion, I agree with the idea that
sports
 are not just activities to bring pleasure. They
also
 bring major
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 in
people
’s well being and help society to grow.
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