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Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #part #life #effects #lifestyles #diet
Nowardays
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Nowadays
 majority of
people
 are spending of their time at
work
 more than being at
iregadless
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regardless
 of you are male or female.
This
 is due to economic expenses. Put simply
long
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 time ago most
woman
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women
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 never used to go to
work
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therefore
 they used to do all the
choirs
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chores
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 including making
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homemade
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home made
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homemade
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food
 and to attend to other needs of the house.
On the other
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 close relatives used to visit and demonstrate their own cuisines to promote
variety
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a variety
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 of
food
 and taste. For
this
 reason
that is
 why most
people
 opt for takeaways even though they know
its
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it's
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 unhealthy
practise
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. In
this
essay
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i
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 am going to agree that majority of
people
 are in for fast
food
 due to
people
hustle
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 to put
food
 on the table. There is usually nobody at
home
 to attend to the house
upkeeping
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. I strongly believe
this
 has endangered
people
's lifestyle medically. A lot of
people
 have turned to be obese leading to lots of chronic
dieseases
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diseases
 and
forsed
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forced
 to be on
life style
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lifestyle
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 diet.
Conversley
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Conversely
 these
people
people
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should hold workshops to campaign for going back to traditional was of preparing
home made
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homemade
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food
 and eating
healthlife
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health life
healthy life
 style.
People
 should be encouraged to grow their own organic
food
 even if it means purchasing them. There should be a duty roaster introduced to balance
work
 and
home
. In a
conclusion
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 the balance of
work
 and
home
lifestle
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lifestyle
 should be equal
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in order
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inorder
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in order
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 for
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
 to stay healthy to reduce medical expenses and to stay healthy.
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