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In many countries, small shops are closing. Give your reasons about this. Is it positive or negative? Give examples from your knowledge and experience.

#countries #shops
There are many countries where
mini stores
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 are shutting down. According to
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me
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this
 is negative and there could be many causes of it. So, we will be discussing all ideas and give relevant reasons.
Firstly
, the small
shops
 that are running in streets and on roads,
they
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apply
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provide valuable items. Some
people
says
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 that after closing these big malls and hotels are being made which
too
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 makes city beautiful and these due to these
shops
 our city looks dirty. But the question is can everyone afford to buy items from malls and eat food in Hotels. In
India
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 around 70 Percent population is that which earn on daily basis. They hardly earn 400 to 600 rupees in
day
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a day
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. So, How can they afford
buying
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to buy
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 and
eating
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eat
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 foods from
such
 expensive places
.
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 If all these small stores get closed, how can a
middle class
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middle-class
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 man survive
.
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 Another reason is that closing all the
mini
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mini-shops
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shops
 will take the employment of lots of
people
 as in our country 20
percent
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 of
people
 have
shops
. It will make them
umemployed
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unemployed
.
However
, it is true that plaza would give employment to some
peoples
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people
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 but not all the
people
 and these small
shops
 are
also
 a type of
bussiness
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business
.
For
example
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 if suppose a shop shuts, It will
umemploy
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employ
 the whole family as in future his son would have taken his place and run the
shops
.
Therefore
, another big cause is it will increase
umemployment
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unemployment
 in our country. At
last
, I would like to conclude by saying that it is
very
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 negative idea to shut all the
shops
 as it
effect
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effects
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employement
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employment
 as well as basic necessities of
Lower
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the Lower
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 class of our society.
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  • economic impact
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