People are encouraged to get rid of things in order to get the news of fashion and the latest technology. Do The disadvantages of a throwaway society outweigh The economic advantages?

It is
irrefutablet
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irrefutable
that consumerism is increasing these days due to
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modifications done in the products,
such
as domestic, clothing and electronic gadgets. In
this
essay, I will discuss both pros and cons of
this
attitude,
however
in my opinion there are more drawbacks to consider as it has
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impact on our environment and
life
. Looking at the positive side, due to
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consumerism, the mass production of
the
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goods is increasing which is causing more employment for the citizens and
this
would be a major factor for the decline in poverty. And
also
more options for the consumers. Take cellphones as an example,
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there was only
small
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nokia
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phone
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now there is a variety
such
as
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and apple.
This
all is
genrating
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generating
a revenue for the nation which would be responsible for the development of the nation.
However
, disadvantages are more detrimental and should be taken into account, which includes the waste collection and imbalance between personal and professional
life
.
This
use-and-throw culture is the main factor for the garbage since it can not be recycled. the whole waste is just dumped into landfills or the sea and
this
would be the way for water pollution especially affecting
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marine
life
.
Thus
, disturbing the ecosystem. Another negative development to consider is the desire of people to
acheive
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achieve
everything as people are becoming materialistic. In order to
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their desires they are becoming
workaholic
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,
this
not only affects their health but
also
their personal
life
. In conclusion, despite the advantages
such
as revenue and employment, the downside is more deleterious as it affects the
life
of an individual as well as the environment.
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