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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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One of the most conspicuous trends among today's
students
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 is taking a
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 off for travelling or working before commencing tertiary education. Some
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 thịnk that
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 is a waste of
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 while others believe that
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 has many benefits. In my opinion, I completely agree that taking a
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year
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 is an intelligent decision if we can
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 effectively on gaining some life and work experience. The
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 benefit of taking a
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year
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 is that you can
use
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time
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 to gain new
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 by working for some small company or doing a small start-up. By working, you can learn and improve some 4
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required essential
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 as teamwork
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, communication
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,
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 management, p
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skills
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, etc. These
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 might help
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 excel in their academic
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 or even in their working environment in the future.
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, working is the best way to help
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 gain work experience that may help them in their career later.
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, for some underprivileged
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, working is a chance that helps them save some money for their
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 tuition in the future.
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, when having a
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 break,
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 will have more
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 to find out and understand more about themselves and become more mature. If
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 spend
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rying new things or working, they will have more opportunities to learn and self-reflect about their strengths, weaknesses, and life purpose. Understanding oneself is hard, but when a person can do it, they will know what they want to do or what they want to
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 and
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 they will be able to choose the right school. Another benefit of
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year
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 is that
students
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 can have
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 to learn new knowledge. Through travelling, a person can learn more about history, local culture,
people
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 of a country…. or even improve their English
skills
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 (If they travel to English using country).
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 travelling, they can
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gap
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 to take part in short online courses in order to broaden their mindset.
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, some hardworking
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 can
use
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gap
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year
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 as a
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 to relax after hard studying
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. Studying is hard, pressure and it requires a large amount of g
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matter, which can cause stress to
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' minds.
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, they can make
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 of the
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 to reduce their stress, improve their mental and physical health in order to prepare for a new challenge
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 ahead.
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, they can
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 spend more quality
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 with close
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 to strengthen their relationships bond in return for the busy
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 period before. In conclusion, taking a
gap
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year
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 is a good idea since it helps us gain more work-life experiences, but only when you
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 the
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 effectively.

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