IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#students #gap #year #university #travel #gain #work #idea #waste #time
One of the most conspicuous trends among today's
students
 is taking a
year
 off for travelling or working before commencing tertiary education. Some
people
 thịnk that
this
 is a waste of
time
 while others believe that
this
 has many benefits. In my opinion, I completely agree that taking a
gap
year
 is an intelligent decision if we can
use
 the
time
 effectively on gaining some life and work experience. The
first
 benefit of taking a
gap
year
 is that you can
use
this
time
 to gain new
skills
 by working for some small company or doing a small start-up. By working, you can learn and improve some 4
.0
Change preposition
of 4.0
show examples
required essential
skills
such
 as teamwork
skills
, communication
skills
,
time
 management, p
roblem solving
Add a hyphen
problem-solving
show examples
skills
, etc. These
skills
 might help
students
 excel in their academic
study
 or even in their working environment in the future.
Besides
, working is the best way to help
people
 gain work experience that may help them in their career later.
Furthermore
, for some underprivileged
students
, working is a chance that helps them save some money for their
study
 tuition in the future.
Secondly
, when having a
year
 break,
students
 will have more
time
 to find out and understand more about themselves and become more mature. If
students
 spend
time
 o
n t
Change preposition
apply
show examples
rying new things or working, they will have more opportunities to learn and self-reflect about their strengths, weaknesses, and life purpose. Understanding oneself is hard, but when a person can do it, they will know what they want to do or what they want to
study
 and
then
 they will be able to choose the right school. Another benefit of
g
ap
Add an article
a gap
the gap
show examples
year
 is that
students
 can have
time
 to learn new knowledge. Through travelling, a person can learn more about history, local culture,
people
 of a country…. or even improve their English
skills
 (If they travel to English using country).
Besides
 travelling, they can
use
gap
time
 to take part in short online courses in order to broaden their mindset.
Finally
, some hardworking
students
 can
use
this
gap
year
 as a
time
 to relax after hard studying
time
. Studying is hard, pressure and it requires a large amount of g
ray
Change the spelling
grey
show examples
matter, which can cause stress to
students
' minds.
Therefore
, they can make
use
 of the
time
 to reduce their stress, improve their mental and physical health in order to prepare for a new challenge
study
time
 ahead.
Moreover
, they can
also
 spend more quality
time
 with close
people
 to strengthen their relationships bond in return for the busy
study
 period before. In conclusion, taking a
gap
year
 is a good idea since it helps us gain more work-life experiences, but only when you
use
 the
time
 effectively.
Submitted by Andy on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: