It is sometimes said that people who do physically hard jobs should be paid as much as those with higher-level qualifications. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples.

It is considered by many that
people
who have physically
streinous
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strenuous
occupations ought to have the same salaries or wages as those with tertiary-level qualifications.
Labor
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jobs
are equally important as office
jobs
for the
continous
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continuous
growth and development of a certain country. In my opinion, I completely agree with the statement, because of a number of
a
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reasons.
Firstly
, handy
jobs
is
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are
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essential for a country's system. It is often the
jobs
that are needed to be done in other to provide professional workers
a
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place to
work
.
For instance
,
labor
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labour
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workers are mostly construction bricklayers building
infrastruces
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infrastructures
for companies and industries to employ skilled graduates.
Therefore
, without their contributions to the workforce or their availability, there won't be places to
work
. Salaries paid to
these category
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this category
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of
people
should be equal as their expertise and
labor
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labour
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is
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are
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effective for workplaces and corporate buildings.
Furthermore
, there is a lot of risks associated with taking part in physically difficult
jobs
, which involves a lot of stress and lifting heavy objects that can
consequently
damage the health system of
people
with
such
duties in comparison to
people
working remotely and in offices with less danger or threat on their health.
Additionally
, most of
this
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these
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workers can not
work
long term because of health issues and age.
Hence
, if
pays
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pay
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are not increased to benefit their struggles,
less
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fewer
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amount
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fewer
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of
people
will be motivated to
work
those
jobs
leading to a detrimental effect for the country. In conclusion, I strongly believe that albeit educated professionals receive
large
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a large
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amount
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amounts
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of wages
as a result
of their talents,
knowlege
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knowledge
and skills, hard
labor
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labour
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jobs
also
require
equal
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an equal
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amount of pay for their crucial contributions to improve the
economy
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economic
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system.
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  • physically demanding
  • manual labor
  • intellectual jobs
  • compensation
  • health risks
  • living wage
  • income inequality
  • economic well-being
  • undervaluing
  • vital sectors
  • skill level
  • education and training
  • investment
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