many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. other believe that government should take care of it. discuss both views and give your opinion.
Health
is majorly depend
on Change the verb form
majorly depends
person's
will or preference or how Correct article usage
a person's
onw
wants to lead his or her our life. Correct your spelling
one
now
However
I believe Add a comma
,However
government's
role is essential as well, to bring upfront Correct article usage
the government's
healthy
nation through healthy individuals.
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a healthy
First
and foremost, each and every individual should take care of themselves by opting healthy
alternatives and changing their lifestyle. Change preposition
for healthy
For instance
, instead
of consuming junk food like chips, cola, pizza, etcetra
in heft amount, they can include fresh fruits, coconut water, Correct your spelling
etcetera
vegetables
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vegetable
etcetra
. Correct your spelling
etcetera
In addition
to this
doing exercise for 20 minutes, 5 days a week leads to release
of endorphins which Correct article usage
the release
not
only helpful for their physical or mental Add a missing verb
is not
health
but also
it
improves your relationship with their family is along with Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
it also
enchances
the concentration which eventually gives them success at work.
Correct your spelling
enhances
On the other hand
, there are other group
of people who argue that Change the wording
groups
government
should introduce policies or programmes to aware people about
the benefits of Change preposition
of
balanced
diet. Apart from the Add an article
a balanced
government
should compel private institute to organis
games or other activities from time to time, Correct your spelling
organise
also
follow the same practice in government
should also
keep in mind the health
of vulnerable population like children and pregnant women who needs
extra care and assistance. Change the verb form
need
For instance
, education about iron supplements should be given in school for adolescents
girls.
In conclusion, Replace the word
adolescent
although
government
is encouraging people Add an article
the government
making
policies Change the verb form
to make
but
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apply
health
is more of individual responsibility as it is in his or her hand how they want to live their life.Submitted by mani1995sha on
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