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Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays more and more
people
 are attracted to extreme
sports
 and dangerous
activities
. The reason seems to lay within the fact that individuals lack
adrenaline
 in their everyday
life
 and
this
 essay will discuss
this
 topic. Historically, it was set that humanity fought for survival for the longest time,
thus
 the
adrenaline
 hormone was constantly released into the body. The amount of stress ancient human beings had to face and
challenges
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the challenges
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 they had to go through just to be alive can be unimaginable for modern individuals. Yet, the history of the survival of our ancestors
have
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has
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 left an imprint in our DNA, making
people
 want to have a splash of
adrenaline
 into our organisms. Centuries of technological evolution
resulted
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inresulted
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people
 facing minimal or no danger in everyday
life
, as everything is made for
comfort
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the comfort
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 and safety of
the
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apply
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society. Men hardly have to fight physically with anyone or anything in
order
 to provide food for the family, and there are many tools that make
life
 easier. Some tend to believe that
modern
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the modern
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 lifestyle is dull,
thus
, they start looking for adventures. They play dangerous
sports
 and search for threatening
activities
 in
order
 to add some
colors
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colours
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into
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to
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 their lives. American research that was made in 1980 showed that those
people
 who are involved in dangerous
activities
 or
sports
 tend to have closer neuron connections which means that their brains work faster and better compared to those of the ordinary
people
 who do not engage in any threatening
activities
.
Therefore
, some individuals might purposely put themselves in stressful situations in
order
 to get their
brain
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brains
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 to work more effectively. Overall,
daily
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the daily
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life
 of modern
people
 seems to be safe, though our bodies need a splash of
adrenaline
 from
time-to-time
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time to time
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.
People
 appear to be attracted to dangerous
sports
 and
activities
 in
order
 to make their
life
 more interesting and brain work more efficiently.
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