Buying things on the internet, such as books, air ticket and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Issues related to purchasing
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these days. Shopping on
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networks
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such
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as books, air
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tickets
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and groceries
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more popular. It is my belief that the positive effects of
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phenomenon could certainly offset its disadvantages. One principal disadvantage is that purchasing on the worldwide
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has led to important disadvantages as well.
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and foremost, people who purchase do not know real products.
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because they only see
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from pictures that might adjust in colour and texture.
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, when they receive the products tend to differ from the pictures. The
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criticism is that wasting their time when individuals want to change
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.
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means that individuals who pay money have
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, they might take a long time for contact with retails. To illustrate, buying plane tickets that are more expensive costs, if clients have
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, they will take more time to refund the tickets. In spite of these negative effects,
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, it is convenient when people buy
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some things
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on the internet.
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because
costumers
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customers
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who
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to
acess
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access
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tend to use it for seeking and buying
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stuff
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.
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,
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woman who
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in
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suburb
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area
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far from shopping malls want to purchase some
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furniture
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
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. As
the
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results
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result
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, they can search on websites and select
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furniture
furnitures
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that
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want.
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, reviewing
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products are good for making decisions.
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means that some websites have comments in
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from other clients that can make their own decision
easiler
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easier
when they read before choosing
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a product
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, clothes shops
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on
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lazada
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Canada
websites have reviews that express feeling from customers
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as good quality and good
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recommendations
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. For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that the benefits of buying
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are
overriden
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overridden
by drawbacks.
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, people should purchase
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on
worldwide
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a worldwide
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network
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Digital marketplace
  • Online transaction
  • Cybersecurity
  • Fraudulent websites
  • Convenience
  • Variety
  • Flexibility
  • Price comparison
  • Customer review
  • Return policy
  • Brick-and-mortar store
  • Physical inspection
  • Data breach
  • Economic impact
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