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Crime rates in most countries is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. What do you think? What can be done to reduce crime rate?

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It is undeniable that urban
areas
 in most countries have a strong security system than rural
areas
 because it is the centre of civilizations and complies a rich person which affects a significantly higher
rate
 of
crime
. From my point of view, the higher
crime
 rates must be an important issue that
governments
 and
residents
 in the
country
 have to be concerned about.
To begin
 with, the importance of
crime
rate
 shows the ability of government sectors for developing
country
 and a level of safeguard of
people
 in the
country
.
For instance
, some countries that have a higher proportion of criminal problems in the city illustrate a non-effective of
governments
 for distribution of income to
residents
 in a
country
 because if they have appropriate salaries that match with cost of living in the
country
, it will not have a
crime
. Another example is individuals will not safe when they stay in the city.
In other words
,
this
country
 will become an unsafe society for living or travelling.
However
, the higher
rate
 of criminal problems can be reduced by many methods from both
governments
 and
residents
 in the
country
. From my perspective, it should start with
governments
 sectors to increase safeguard measures in all over
areas
 and expand civilizations to rural
areas
. In order to raise better living conditions for
people
 outside the city and make every
people
 have the same financial status. In part of
residents
 in the
country
, they can reduce
this
rate
 by taking care of their assets as much as they can and avoiding dangerous situations if they can avoid them. To summarize, it is extremely hard for every
country
 to avoid zero criminal problems but we can reduce the
crime
rate
 if every sector collaborates together and affect every
people
 have better living conditions in every area.
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