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Many people today find that the cost of attaining a University-level education is extremely high for students and their families. What are the causes of this situation, and how can governments, Universities and the students themselves overcome the problem?

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The cost of obtaining
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higher
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 has become luxurious for many people, preventing them from getting a University degree.
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 issue, as well as suggest some solutions. Several reasons lay behind the fact of higher
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 so expensive.
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 of all,
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 that want to have a good reputation and attract talented
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 need to hire rigorous and experienced professors, who demand well-paid compensation.
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, to stay competitive,
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 expend large budgets to maintain a nice campus, as it is of the criteria for
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 to choose an
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.
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, the skyrocketed tuition has limited the number of individuals receiving higher
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. To overcome
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 issue, the governments and
Universities
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 will need to work together. Governments could subsidize the cost of
education
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 for
students
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 from vulnerable groups of the society and help them obtain a degree in technical spheres, where there is a lack of professionals.
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 would kill two birds with one stone, allowing individuals to receive an
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 and fill empty workplaces.
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, if a person wants to attain some specific specialization,
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 could support
students
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 by providing them with on-campus jobs to cover their tuition and/or living expenses. In conclusion, many
students
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 and their families find obtaining a University
education
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 extremely costly, which is explained by expensive staff retention and campus maintenance costs. To make higher
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 more attainable, governments and
universities
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 can assist individuals by offering a subsidy and allowing
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 to work inside the campus.
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