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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will easier if there are fewer languages in the worlds. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#year #languages #people #life #worlds
In the modern
world
,
people
 around the
world
 communicate with each other
with
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in
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 several different
languages
 depending on wherever they live. Nowadays some
languages
 are replaced and
then
disappeard
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disappeared
disappear
 respectively. Some individuals believe that
this
 is not crucial since the fewer
languages
 in the
world
, the easier life will be. Analyzing the reduction of language's barriers as well as the
money
 that can be saved from having abundant
languages
 will prove
this
. The decreasing amount of
languages
 can reduce the misunderstanding between communicators. The foreigners cannot completely understand the definition of every
words
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word
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, phrase or slangs words while they are
using
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itusing
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.
This
 will easily misleading information or
unable
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be unable
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 to deliver the messages. To illustrate, in Thailand where
people
 can barely use English in daily life, they
are not be
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are not
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 able to give any information
for
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to
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 international
travelers
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travellers
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 asking for help.
Moreover
, there
are
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is
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 a huge amount of
money
 that
spending
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spent
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 on
the
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apply
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translation. Without various
languages
, there is no need for any translation system.
Therefore
,
this
 will help
people
 save a lot of
money
 as well as time.
For example
, if
people
using
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use
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 the same language, Chinese do not need to hire
any
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a
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 translator while they are attending the global meeting. Having considered
this
 matter carefully, even several
languages
 mean there is a diversity in the
world
, having fewer
languages
 will
be make
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make
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 life easier in terms of deductions the misunderstanding while communication and saving more
money
. In a nutshell, I definitely agree with
this
 mentioned idea.
Submitted by Varaiphand on

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