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The charts show the sources of electricity produced 4 countries between 2003 and 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuras. and make comparisons where comparisons where relevant

The charts show the sources of electricity produced 4 countries between 2003 and 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuras. and make comparisons where comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of 3 types of
electricity
sources
 produced in four countries from 2003 to 2008.
It is clear that
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 was the most popular
energy
 in
Morocco
,
whereas
 the proportion of fossil
fuel
 in India was
highest
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the highest
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. Nuclear
power
 was not common in India,
Morocco
 and Vietnam. In
Morocco
 and Sweden, people organised
electricity
 by
hydro
 more than any
energy
sources
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source
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. The proportion of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 in
Morocco
 was 95
percent
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per cent
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.
This
 was followed by Sweden with 52%. Fossil
fuel
 was
lowest
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the lowest
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. The figure for it in
Morocco
 was 5% which was nearly the same for the
another
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other
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. Sweden was a country producing
electricity
 by nuclear
power
most
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apply
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with 44% In Vietnam,The percentage of fossil
fuel
 was nearly the same
for
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as
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 the figure
of
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for
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
. Fossil
fuel
 contributed 56% and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 made up 44%.
Indian
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India
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 used
electricity
 by fossil
fuel
 the most with 82%.
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
 and nuclear
power
 were less popular types of
energy
sources
 in India. 14% of
energy
sources
was
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were
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 consumed by
hydro
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hydropower
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power
.
This
 was followed by nuclear
power
 with only 4%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, sources, hydro, power, energy, morocco, fuel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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