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Many things can influence the academic achievement and emotional growth of a student. In this regard, peers have more of an impact than teachers do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Some people think that schoolmates have
significant
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 effect on the academic performance and emotional development of a student than
teachers
 do. In my opinion, I think that classmates are more impactful as academic
moltivation
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motivation
 while educators serve as a more righteous guide to
student’s
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 emotional maturity.
First
, it has been proven that peers to be more
moltivated
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motivated
 when performing under pressure. Now there is a ranking system between class members and have more competitions to choose the academic championship. If with healthy practice, these stimulations can put learners forward in the academic race so they have to do their best,
therefore
, in
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 peer rivalry brings about a greater effect on individual success.
Second
, at the same time, school
teachers
 can provide emotional orientation for students due to their experience in life. Young learners are often prone to
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dilemma
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 because of
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 lack of experience.
Moreover
, educators with
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 lifetime are able to provide mental support to back their students up from difficulties that they are facing. In
this
 regard, the advice from
teachers
 would be more helpful than from peers, who might have not seen enough in life to come up with the best solutions. In
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 I partly agree with the statement, as
teachers
 and friends
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 each individual
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 different aspects. While peers’ competitions can improve students’ academic achievement, support from
teachers
 can be more
efficiacious
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efficacious
 to their sentimental well-being.
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