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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

#scientists #tourists #travel #environment #pole #development
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With the advent of
technology
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 humans have experienced many unexpected
thing
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things
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 and now has become fascinated about exploring these
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 of things. It is a recent trend nowadays that people usually want to visit
such
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 natural
places
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like
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south
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the south
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pole
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. In
this
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essay
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 we will discuss
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of travelling to
such
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places
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Firstly
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, Visiting
at
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places
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 like
south
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the south
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pole
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 not only increase
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 ability to
innvoate
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innovate
 new things but
also
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 to learn different new things. Visiting
south
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the south
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pole
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 can help us in experiencing
new
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type
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 of atmosphere and how to
surivive
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survive
 at
such
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type
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 of
places
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.
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, If we travel at some
places
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 like south
pole
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 only, at the place the whole atmosphere will be different, so it somehow
help
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 human being to get additional information of that
places
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, we may see some new creatures and could learn about them.
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Also
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 we may be able to find new ways to endure that
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 of environment.
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,
these
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type
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 of knowledge will surely help
scientist
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scientists
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 in some way or other. There could be disadvantages too of going to
such
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places
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, when a person
go
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 to
these kind
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 of new
places
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 they go with proper
equiment
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equipment
 and food
but
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as we have not proper information about those
places
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.
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, it could be a big drawback and so we can be in trouble. Let me
expain
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explain
 it with
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, We can see lots of people
try
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 to visit remote
places
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 but
thier
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their
 end is very devastating because these are all new
places
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. They start visiting these
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 with
lot
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 of motivation but as time passes they get
frustated
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frustrated
 as they are not keen
of
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on
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 that
enviornment
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environment
 and so most of the time end up
by
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losing their life. To conclude, I would say that it is necessary for
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a scientist
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scientist
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scientists
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 to visit these
sort
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 of
places
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 for new innovations but the
conditon
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condition
 should be that they should have some idea about the environment and necessary items so that they can go with all those and can survive there.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote natural environment
  • scientific research
  • climate change
  • environmental preservation
  • economic benefits
  • conservation efforts
  • habitat disruption
  • pollution
  • cultural disruption
  • indigenous populations
  • commercialization
  • safety risks
  • personal enrichment
  • ecosystems
  • awareness
  • appreciation for nature
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