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With a growing world population, one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?,

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As the world evolves, and the quality of life improved with an increase in population numbers, some problems started to stem. And the scarcity of
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 is one of these major issues. I partially agree with the group that said the solution is in genetically modified
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, we have to admit that
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 idea can contribute to problem-solving, but it is by no mean the most right way. By using
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 process we could help in increasing the quantity of
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 served in different parts of the world. Meaning that
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 type of
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 would appear on our supermarket shelves. making it easier for us to find it.
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, it could be synthesised and  modified to provide us with vitamins and minerals we could not find in regular
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, there are many drawbacks to
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 process. Perhaps the
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 and main one is that many people do not trust
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 whole industry. Many people all over the world refused to buy or eat
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 kind of kosher. Added to
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 the manufacturing  problem with a lot of sources needed. Which in turn do not contribute well in tackling the main problem as the places suffering from starvation are the same ones that would have few or no sources and can not afford to produce or fund these factories. To sum up, while making industrial
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 have some benefits, there are some issues and problems connected with it.
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