Many people say that they believe it is important to protect the environment but make no effort to do anything about it themselves. Why do you think this is the case? What action do you think individuals should take to protect the environment?

The controversial issue in respect of
environment
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protection, in today’s
society
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is continuing to polarize the public debate. Some
people
claim that it is essential to our society, whereas only a few
people
to
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take measures to protect. From my point of view, I believe that individuals should play a part in
this
campaign. Admittedly,
people
have awareness of
environment
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protection, while they cannot get rid of the usage of high-end products, which could allow
people
work
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more convenient and high-efficient.
For instance
,
people
would drive
private
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car
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in order to commute more quickly, while they ignore the side-effects of private transportation,
such
as carbon dioxide, which would cause the emission of greenhouse gases and even result in global warming.
Hence
,
people
would prior to themselves for their certain purposes, and they may not concern about the influences
to
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the
environment
, and it is difficult to require them to abandon these products.
Nevertheless
, saving
the
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nature cannot
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reply
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on
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a smaller group of
people
, individuals should play a core role in it.
For example
,
people
can choose more environmental-friendly lifestyles by riding bikes and taking public transportation
such
as
subway
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and bus, which would largely reduce the exhaustion of toxic gases in
atmosphere
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.
Also
, officers can print
less
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papers for their work, achieving
paperless
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a paperless
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office. In conclusion, it is crucial for everyone to take responsibility to protect the
environment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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