Study shows that many criminals have a low level education.For that reason, some people believe that the bast way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?

Some recent researchers point out that most
of
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criminals
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have a
low level
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education
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, which results in many of them re-offend right after being released.
Therefore
, it is believed that the only way to cut down on crime is to provide those
people
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good
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education
in
prison
. I totally agree with that idea,
besides
, I
also
recommend some other ways that can be effective in solving that problem.
To begin
with, it is well said that we should educate lawbreakers better in
prison
. A lot of
people
who have just been free from their penalties find it difficult for them to find a job, which leads to re-offensive activities very soon after. Some educational programs like vocational training or orientation will really do their works. They equip those wrongdoers with appropriate skills that help them to seek
for
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a good position, with
stable
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salary.
For instance
, in Canada, each
prisoners
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have to read a number of books, have
themselves
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a job certification before they can be released,
as a result
, Canada has the lowest rate of
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people
who re-offend. Another proposal to alleviate the rate of re-offenders can be educating everyone to have a more sympathetic look toward
people
after
prison
. A multitude of those
people
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seriously discriminated
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it nearly impossible to re-
intergrate
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integrate
into society. As a consequence, violence or even
murdering
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are like a kind of revenge.
Last
but not least, the government has to be strict to a certain extent in declaring punishment
such
as long life imprisonment, imprisonment with hard work
beside
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capital punishment. Ergo, only
education
in
prison
is not the solution to educate
criminal
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, another method must be applied to reduce
the
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crime. To conclude,
although
most of the offenders have limited
education
so that they do atrocious work. It is a better measure
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teaching in
prison
may help them to limit crime and
enhances
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better
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future.
However
, from my perspective,
beside
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this
, child
education
, severe punishment would be the other best solution to
this
menace.
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