write an essay presenting the pros and cons of teens using social media

Over
last
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10 years ago, social
media
has grown extremely fast and become central to the lives of hundred
million
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of
people
. Nowadays,
people
are taking a part
of
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one or more platforms and most of them are teenagers. Whether is Twitter, Instagram, Facebook, Snapchat, Pinterest, Tumblr and others, social
media
is being a part of their lives. Many
people
may think that the use of social
media
makes them more sociable, interactive and trendy. They spend
considerable
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part of their lives interacting with each other through social
media
. We know that
,
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social
media
has some advantages and disadvantages for the users. It
also
can give good or bad effects on society. There are some questions,
such
as is social
media
making us more or less sociable? Does social
media
have more positive or negative effects on
society
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? Nowadays, social
media
has more negative effects on society
especially
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for teenagers. The
first
is social
media
leads to addiction. Why? If we realize today,
people
even
adult
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till kids spend more time
in
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social
media
. If we take
the
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advantages
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of
this
,
people
can know a lot of good information, learn new things, exchange ideas and
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hone their networking skills. Social
media
presents
many
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good information, like how to
makeup
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, how to cook, news from worldwide, music, movies, books or others. We
also
can solve our homework or questions for our assignments in school, college or at work. Social
media
can
also
help provide an effective platform for enhancing children or teens’ knowledge.
Besides
that, the information can help us to develop our reading and writing skills.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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