some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do go agree?

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To travel is to discover the world. When
people
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make
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the journey
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journey
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to
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different countries, they will
also
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face the diversity of tradition. Personally, I agree that when in Rome, do as
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Romans do, which mean
people
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should adjust themselves to that
culture
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. I think
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way for two reasons which I will examine in
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essay.
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, you will truly understand the different
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culture
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cultures
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. Homestay is
one
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of
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a great
way
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ways
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to immerse yourself
to
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in
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local
culture
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.
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, staying at a homestay will help you connect with the local
people
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more easily because you will share a lot of time together.
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, there are many activities to enjoy and so much local food to try.
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, you will realize the way of their life and the fundamental of their
culture
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.
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, you will have a pleasant journey if you can adjust yourself to the local tradition.
This
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is best demonstrated by my experience.
Last
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year, my brother and I went to a small village which is located in
the
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rural area of China, the main local food of
this
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village
is consisted
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consists
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of
a
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goat meat.
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Nevertheless
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we have never tried it before, we have to get used to it,
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, there will be nothing to eat.
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, it is a great opportunity for you to try new
thing
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things
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and you will gain a brand-new experience. In conclusion,
people
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should adapt themselves to local
custom
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customs
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whenever they roam to other countries. Since it will
benefits
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you in terms of understanding cultural diversity and the enjoyment of the whole trip.
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, world peace can
be happened
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if we understand each other.
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