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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, in several countries, the quantity of younger population has become more and more compared with older population.
However
,
Both
 are important in our daily lives. In
this
 essay, I will examine the significance of
both
 ages. On the one side of
argument
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the argument
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, Young Citizens have strength in
both
 body and mind. Their strength makes them have
power
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the power
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 to be responsible for their jobs or activities. They can use physical
power
 in construction along with mind
power
 to work under the pressure.
Moreover
, teenagers have learned something new more than elders which allows them more creativity as well as innovation. They can use new technology to adapt to the world. These skills can produce and develop economic growth in their countries.
As a result
, Young
adults
 can use fresh minds and more energy to be beneficial to their enterprise. Turning to the other side of the argument, seniors have more
experience
 than juniors. They have worked for a long time. The more you work, the more
experience
 you get.
Although
elders
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 population don’t have strength in body, their experiences are essential to working in
enterprise
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. With inexperience for young
adults
 can make it easier to fail.
In addition
, older
people
 can better control their emotions when they are angry or sad, which is a good benefit when working with other
people
. We can see that many companies have older
people
 as CEO or board managers because they have
both
experience
 and
emotion
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 control which young
adults
 don’t have. To conclude,
Both
 generations are crucial in working, including daily life. While young
adults
 have body
power
 and new
creativity
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 thinking, Older
people
 gain more
experience
 to cope with their work. In my opinion, it cannot be said that one outweighs the other. [291 words]
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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