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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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The world problem in terms of
growing
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the growing
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 amount of public suffering from
health
 problems,
as a result
 of eating too much junk
food
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 reached its peak in global discussions. In my opinion, I agree that governments have to increase tax on fast
food
, as it will benefit not only people but societies in total. I will try to prove my point of view in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, I would like to state that bad
food
causing
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 a lot of
health
 issues and it is a scientific fact. Humans can suffer from obesity, heart problems,
diabities
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diabetes
 and liver diseases.
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, more than 60% of
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population
popullation
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the popullation
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 in the United States of America suffer from
overweight
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being overweight
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 by consuming unhealthy
meal
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 every day.
Moreover
, their hospital spendings
takes
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 half of their salary and
creating
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 many uncomfortable treatments. Another point to consider is that all these
health
 problems listed above can lead to
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the rise
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rise
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of
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 anxiety levels and suicide rates. It can decrease
popullation
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population
 and create many other troubles
such
 as lack of teachers, doctors or policemen. Without
them
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 people will start to suffer more and more.
Finally
,
increasing
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tax
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 on fast
food
, governments can gain more healthy, smart people who can boom the economy. Countries will save millions of pounds on
health
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 sector from their budgets and can redirect it to schools or universities. In the long run, communities will greatly benefit from these steps. In conclusion, governments should increase prices for
this
 kind of cuisine to have
healthier
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a healthier
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, more mobile and happier nation. In my viewpoint, I believe that
this
 will help us to grow more and enjoy life.
This
 is the key to
successful
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 future.
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