The charts illustrate four types of destination included part-time work, voluntary work, further study and unemployment that graduate and postgraduate students did after leaving the university in 2008
The bar charts illustrate how many graduate and postgraduate
students
after
leaving Change preposition
apply
the
college were doing part-time Correct article usage
apply
work
, voluntary work
, and further
study, and some unemployed students
in the UK in 2008.
Overall
, after graduation, a significant number
of students
went for further
studies, and very few students
chose voluntary work
. Similarly
, a considerable number
of postgraduate students
did further
studies while
few students
went for voluntary work
.
The maximum number
of students
(around 30,000 graduated and 2,725 postgraduate) choose further
study after leaving the college in the period given. Likewise
, Voluntary work
constituted the minimum number
of students
(3,500 graduated and 345
postgraduate).
On the other hand
, part-time work
was the choice of around 18,000 graduated
and 3000 postgraduate Wrong verb form
graduates
students
. After leaving the college in 2008, about 17,000 graduated, and 1700 postgraduate students
were not doing anything.Submitted by sainiriya993 on
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