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Some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead going directly to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages.

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Nowadays , after completing senior secondary education , students go for travel or to
work
 for a duration of time rather than going to their
further
studies
 directly . There are several benefits and disbenefits to
take
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 a break after school .
To begin
 with , the
first
 and foremost advantage , more creativity, knowledge and seriousness about what they want to do
next
 .
For instance
 , even though they are totally indulged in their
studies
 for many years when they have a break , they have no stress on their mind and spend a quantity of their time .
Although
 they grab more knowledge
,
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and have to think freely about their carrier , when the pupil just
go
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 for
studies
 after completing the school
then
 they do not have much time to think about their subjects and interests .
Moreover
 , they have experience .
Nevertheless
 , they go for
work
 , they get a good experience and have a chance to learn well about it practically .
On the other hand
 , some students do not return back to their
studies
 .
For example
 , they are doing a
work
 or job they like it as its earning is good and
work
 is good , they do not like to come back because they are happy with it .
In addition
 ,
although
 they lose the chance to be expert in that field ,
however
 they do their
studies
then
 they have a degree and can take a job in
big
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 company , now they can only do
work
 on
small
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a small
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 scale .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • school leavers
  • real-world experience
  • independence
  • structured environment
  • financial benefits
  • academic momentum
  • gap year
  • rigors
  • sidetracked
  • social disconnect
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