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Levels of Unemployment in 3 countries from 2004-2008

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This
 graph illustrates the
percentage
 of people who did not have jobs in each year from 2004 to 2008 comparing 3 countries, A, B and
C
. Overall, the
percentage
 of the levels of unemployment in
country
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countries
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 A and
C
 show upward trends whereas those in
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countries
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country
C
 show downward trends. In 2004, the
percentage
 of unemployed people in
country
 A was 2 %. It fluctuated
mildly
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 between 2005 and 2007
then
 it rose up to almost 5% in 2008. For
country
C
, the level is barely 1% in 2004 but it increased dramatically to almost 6% in 2008.
Country
C
 even overtook A near 2006. In terms of
country
 B, the level was about 3% in 2004. It did not change much between 2005 and 2006. The
percentage
 dropped to about 1.8% in2007 but it grew back to almost 3% again in 2008.
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