in spite of the advances made in agricultures. many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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In today's world because of development in technology

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specifically

in agriculture,

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accessibility

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foods are easier than before.

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, a vast majority of

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different parts of the world cannot provide

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for themselves. I believe that we can tackle

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problem with some solutions despite the fact that there are

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improtant

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issue. By improving in agriculture, farmers should spend a huge amount of money

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buy

a new machines

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off, providing the advance machine needs cash which brings

farmer

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to sell their products to the company

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a higher price. While agriculture

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industry

make the

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and

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demand

to human, so most of

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humankind

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who are cannot afford to purchase cusine for their family.

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tomatoes with

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, it would be expensive for both producer and consumer.

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humankinds

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humankind

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could not

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buy them and they will be hungry in the future.

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, there are some steps that society can take to mitigate these problems.

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, allocating more funds would be beneficial for the community because they could be supported by the government; whereas, they

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cash

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, in fruits industries , if the man state

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fund , the farmer can harvest fruits with lower price. On the other side, by using nanotechnology,

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scientists

can find a way to produce

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with a lower expenditure; meanwhile, all of the global

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can access

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food

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constantly. If the governs produce

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technology, it could be helpful for poor men.

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they can export

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to underdeveloped

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countries

and gain money; while,

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who

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do not

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have

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can able to buy it

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suitable

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price. To sum up,

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issue

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many reasons;

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, by finding appropriate way all

people

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can resolve

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subject easily.

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in spite of the advances made in agricultures. many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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It is sometimes suggested that primary school children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. What are the advantages and disadvantages? Do you think advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage?

Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transit such as bus, train, or subway. Discuss both these positions and give your own opinion.

Some think dangerous extreme sports such as skydiving and rock climbing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important international language? Give reasons for your answer.