Q. Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion.

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It is argued that using cultural
traditions
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as a
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attraction will
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them,whilst some
people
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believe that it can be the only choice to keep these
traditions
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.
This
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essay will discuss both
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arguments
and explain that why
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method could be beneficial.
First
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off,a group of
people
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claim that cultural
traditions
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should not be used to attract
tourists
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.The reason
of
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this
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arguement
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argument
is that they think if
people
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from other cultures be aware of their
traditions
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,they will be destroyed.
For instance
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,there where a group of sun worshiper living in
Northen
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Northern
Africa that did not allow
people
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from other cultures to enter in their tribes.When they were asked about the reason
of
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resistance,they said that strangers are cultural threats and if we let them know about our
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,the sun will be destroyed.
On the other hand
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,many
people
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believe that cultural
traditions
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are a kind of tourism attraction.Indeed,their belief is that being aware of cultural
traditions
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by
tourists
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not only do not destroy them
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but
also
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is a good resource
of
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for
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making
money
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.Surveys prove that the
money
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that is
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attained from
tourist
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in order to
visiting
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cultural
traditions
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,will be used to
extended
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the traditional places. personally,I believe that it is a reasonable fact that let cultural
traditions
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become known by
tourists
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.
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,
tourists
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can help the destination's culture to be known by the whole world.
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,more
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visitors
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visiters
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visitors
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will come to be familiar with those
traditions
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and more
money
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will be made.
This
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money
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can
completely
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used in order to reconstruct cultural places like
mousqes
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mosques
or
churchs
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churches
church
. By and large,some tasks could be done to make
people
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from the host culture be aware of
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the positive
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points of
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subject.
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,by monitoring and having
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effective management the cultural
traditions
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will not be
destroyes
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destroyed
and can
also
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become famous and an admiring pattern to the whole world.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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