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Development in technology has brought various environmental problems. Some believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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technological development, human beings are now living in the greatest technological boom times in human history.
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, numerous environmental
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 are unavoidable. Some claim that
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simple
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 to tackle these
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 while others say that these
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 are only can be
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 with by using technology. From my perspective, I firmly lean towards the latter and
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. There is no denying that living a simple
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 is advantageous to a certain extent.
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 emissions would be emitted into the
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atmosphere
 if
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 would not
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 their private vehicles.
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, they could
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 public transportation
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 as buses, trains or taxis.
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,
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those coming from affluent families, they could
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 hybrid transport vehicles or electric cars
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normal cars.
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, the over-exploitation of natural resources
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 as fossil fuels is the main culprit of global warming.
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 have to
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 fossil fuels for
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industrial activities in order to provide
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 for every household.
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,
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 the reason why many contend that a simple
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 would lead to a better world in the future.
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, several feasible solutions can be implemented to alleviate plenty of various environmental
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 by making full
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 of modern technology.
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 of all, the government could allocate more funds to develop many
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 sources of
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such
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 as solar
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, wind
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,... . These are environmentally-friendly
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 and it can only be used by modern machines. Given the proliferation of some renewable sources of
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, it would have a positive impact on the atmosphere and the world
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 a whole. In a nutshell, I strongly believe that
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 can make full
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modern technology in order to remedy the aforementioned issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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