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In some cities of the world, cars are replacing bicycles. However in some other cities, bicycles are replacing cars. What are the reasons for these two developments? In your opinion, which one is better?

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The transportation system is changing in the world as many urban towns are encouraged to
use
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 motor vehicles and many are shifting their trend toward bi-cycles in a reverse mode.
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 cycles in cities. Most of the developing countries are accepting
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cars
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 on their roads because they are in transition from non-fuel vehicles to fuel vehicles. They would like to taste a technology and shift their development pace into top gear.
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, as per The Hindu newspaper, three per cent of Indians are buying
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 for the
first
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 time in their life since
year
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 2000.
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, developed countries have faced the detrimental effects of diesel or
petrol driven
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cars
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. Their citizens are not interested to
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 these pollution exhausters as
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 cause the health problems
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 as cancer, heart attacks and so on. Due to
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,
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most
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the European are building cycle lanes in their towns. So that, people living in
a cities
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cities
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 can get
motivation
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the motivation
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 to drive cycles and feel safe at the same time. According to
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,
government
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 should maintain the balance between fuel
cars
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 and
bi-cycles
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bicycles
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 in their cities. The folks must
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cars
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 only when a destination is far away from their
origin
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 place or they have to take some bulky items.
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, they try to develop their habit to ride a cycle for daily routine works.
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, commute to
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, shopping etcetera. In conclusion, these shifts are motivated
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 the experience of
urban
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the urban
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 population.
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, some are choosing cycles or others
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,
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masses have to choose their vehicle as per their need.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • affluence
  • commuting distances
  • infrastructure
  • rapid growth
  • status symbol
  • environmental concerns
  • bike-sharing programs
  • traffic congestion
  • carbon emissions
  • sustainable
  • liveable environments
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