An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with these problems?

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Developing
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are under enormous pressure as they are losing their trained medical and teaching
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due to migration to rich and achieving
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essay will discuss the causes for these issues and some solutions I will suggest to help
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this
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crisis. There are many reasons why professionals like doctors and teachers are migrating to more
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developed
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, they will get a better salary package compared to what they were previously earning in their own country.
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, with a higher
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they will have a better lifestyle and getting paid
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a higher currency rate will enable them to send money to their families as after conversion it will be worth a lot
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money in an impoverished state.
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, more trained
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professionals
are tempted to migrate to a richer nation for a better future. Several solutions can be suggested to help solve these
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, their government need to increase the salaries of the employees on whom they are relying to progress in the future.
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long term, they will help to
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the economy of the country by having more doctors to help the health sector and teachers to ensure a promising future
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its population.
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, the population of underdeveloped
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need to vote wisely for their government to prevent corruption from happening.
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corrupt
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governments
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won't take
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and will be more
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interested
to steal from the public funds
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of looking after their trained
proffesionals
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professionals
. To conclude, the difficulties faced by the underdeveloped
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can be solved by the suggested solutions but they are not likely to happen overnight.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled labor
  • Developed nations
  • Essential services
  • Healthcare
  • Education
  • Economic impact
  • Social impact
  • Migration
  • Inequality
  • Disparity
  • Foreign aid
  • Investment
  • Community
  • Dependency
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