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Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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When you want to boil your rice, you
use
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 a pressure pot.
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, when you need to blend foodstuffs, you
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 an automatic blender.When you want to press your
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, you
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 an electric iron, and so on and so forth .
This
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 and many more of these
home
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equipments
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equipment
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, make it evident that
technology
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 cannot be left out when it comes to the
home
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. Everything we do,involves
technology
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an
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without one, it seems impossible to live,or that's what it has made us
to
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become. It is of
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 opinion that I strongly agree that without
technology
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, our standard of living is nothing.
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 with, it would be tiresome in
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 present age,if anyone still uses their hands to wash
clothes
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, when there are washing machines,which does the
work
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 faster and accurate.Less amount of time is spent and could be used to do something else.
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, you could even leave and read a book or attend a seminar, while the washer does its
work
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,making life easier.To add to that, you do not have to worry about
clothes
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, as I said earlier, electric irons are there for you to press your
clothes
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 when needed.So, do not worry about that job interview because you have
a
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rumpled cloth!
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,how could we forget the refreshing air that
emmantes
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emanates
 from our air conditioner? Just set the temperature of your choice, and there you have it.There is no need of having to
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an
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and
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 external fan or
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 outside with the purpose of getting the breeze.
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, as opposed to the traditional methods of storing foods,which was very annoying and had
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, we have our fridges to do the
work
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.
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 to
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, many think that the proliferation of
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 appliances are not worth the hassle.They argue that the orthodox ways of
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 living
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 better off than
than
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the present.
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,
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this
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 is true in some aspect, it is worthwhile to say that the advantages that our modern tech has brought to us
outweighs
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 the disadvantages of it with relation to archaic methods. In summary,
technology
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 has played a huge part in our lives when it comes to
home
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 keeping,and it would be safe to say that without it, life will remain to be difficult.
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