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Visa regulations should be relaxed for overseas students. Do you agree or disagree?

#visa #regulations #students
There is no doubt that international studies in booming for
the
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higher studies, while some people believe that the
visa
 regulations are highly strict due to the interest of the youngster, While some pupils believe that higher
study
visa
 should be easy to get for
persue
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pursue
 the higher
study
. I agreed that
for
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international
students
 get some
support
 in
visa
 relaxation for
study
 abroad.
Firstly
, I strongly believe that many
students
 have a dream
for
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study
 abroad after their basic education,
moreover
, for
students
 to get the
study
visa
 is not
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 easy task,
their
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 are many
students
 for applying getting rejected the
visa
beacuse
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because
 of the rule and the strict regulations.
Although
 they are paying
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 high amount and clearing the exams to select for the student
visa
. the main problem
students
 are facing is
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english
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 language test which they have to pass with
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 score of 7
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 each. The university should give some
ralaxation
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relaxation
 in the selection criteria as well as the college fees.
Secondly
, all the international
students
 should
support
 by the government to help
for
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 the funding, because more educated people always have a good advantage for any country to grow.
visa
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 process is really a challenging process for any student.
However
, international
students
 are always
benifical
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beneficial
 for the growth of any country. they
support
 the country economically as well as provide
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good employment. university management should
support
the
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international student to get
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visa
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 and continue their studies. To conclude,
i
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 believe that the
goverment
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government
 should
support
for
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international
students
 to help in the
visa
 process and get
addmission
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admission
in
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 the university.
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