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A museum near home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary /unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Explain why you want to do voluntary/ unpaid work at museum. Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful. Give details of when you would be available.

#museum #home #people #work #skills #qualities
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Dear sir, I have
saw
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 your
advertisment
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advertisement
 about
a
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apply
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voluntary work by a local newspaper, I always
eagarly
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eagerly
eager
 to do unpaid work because since my college I have been doing so many works related to service.
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, I would like to do a
job
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 at
museum
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the museum
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.
This
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 kind of
job
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 gives
a
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me a
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lot of happiness and satisfaction
to
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me
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that's why I would like to do
some
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a
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job
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 at a museum. I did finish a Master degree
of
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in
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 Information Technology and now I am working as a
data base
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database
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 typer at a library, I have four years experience
of
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this
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 field so I think
this
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 kind of
job
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 I could do that ,
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moreover
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 I am a good narrator and I can easily convey to others. My working time in a library is 8am to 4pm ,
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 I can work a museum
at
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from
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5pm to 7pm and
weekend
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at weekend
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 days I can be worked extra two hours
in
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on
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 each
days
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. I would be grateful
,
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 if you would be appointed me. I am looking forward to your positive response as soon as possible. Thanking you, Your's
sincerly
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sincerely
, Lilly.
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