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Modern Technology is now very common in most work place. How do you think this has changed way it worked? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology.

#technology #work #place
The below
process
 illustrates us instant
noodles
 manufacturing
process
 that
use
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 in a factory until it reached
to
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customers with a bucket of
noodles
. Overall,
this
process
 has included 8 major steps including raw material processing in
first
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 stages and
then
further
 preparation including packing at the
last
.
Firstly
, Flour has been delivered through the trucks and it stored in large silos.
Then
 it
mixed
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 with water and oil to produce pulp to make
dough
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a dough
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sheet
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sheets
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 that can produce through rollers.
These
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 sheet of
doughs
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dough
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 has been torn by the
next
 machine to make
it
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noodles
 strips. The above strips
has
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 been modified as a
noodles
 disc to cook it with oil base and it leaves to dry. In the
next
 step vegetables and spices were
adding
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 to those dried
noodles
 including
fill
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it
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them
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 in
a
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cups. At the final stage of
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process
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 these prepared
noodles
 buckets
has
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 been labelling with graphic interfaces to make
it
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them
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 ready for the consumers.
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